She is not original, there is very little to differentiate Cordelia from thousands of teenage protagonists in YA paranormal fiction. The amount of editing errors were very distracting from the story and also just plain aggravating after a while.ĭelia is the main character of Betrayal, a descendant of Zeus and soon-to-be Empress of the gods remaining Empire. "There" for "their/they're" many, many times, "here" instead of "hear", not correctly using quotation marks, or not even using them at all, among other offenses. I am aware this is a self-published author so she may not have the same resources, but it was truly egregious. It simply didn't flow the way a novel should there were abrupt transitions and awkward dialogue and exposition many times in the pages. The beginning suffers the most from the meandering pace, and thus made it hard for me to connect to the characters or to be invested in the outcomes for Delia, Evan, Beth, Niko and Victor.Īdditionally, the writing itself seemed very awkward and stilted at times. Incredibly, ridiculously slow and filled with little real content. Why? Well, my first issue was the pacing. However, I feel like I was counting every single one of those six hundred odd pages it literally sapped my strength to finish this book. However, it was a good idea poorly executed in many parts of this looong book.Ĭoming in at 662 pages, this is far from the longest book I've read this year. I liked the idea for the story (descendants of the Olympian Gods have a hidden, secret Empire in present day and also vampires, werewolves, etc).
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